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《文勇的新托福写作手稿》

作者:刘文勇
出版社:中国人民大学出版社
出版时间:2015-7-14
页数:388页
书号:9787300210254
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附录--文书写作之“个人陈述”(15)

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文章摘要: 本文美联出国考试小编继续为大家整理了《文勇的新托福写作手稿》中的内容,此为附录--文书写作之“个人陈述”;本文主要介绍了优秀PS解析。
6.站在过来人的肩膀上攀登——两篇优秀PS解析
6.1 矛盾与冲突中成长的少年

I used to be quite rebellious when I was in junior high school. I felt so wronged that mother could not understand me and insist me doing exactly what she told to. Although my rebellion was suppressed by mother again and again, I would like so much my mother to understand my ideas and solve my problems, rather than mere criticism. This experience of mine leads to my decision to offer hands to youth in trouble or need and when I learn about social work, I know it is the career by which I can compensate for what is missing in school education and meanwhile realize my dream.

After four years’ efforts, including thorough theory studies and ample field work, Social Work, once an entirely unfamiliar concept to me, has now become my career. During this same period, I, a formerly self-conscious girl who felt uneasy and unsure in a crowd, have become capable of reaching out to people in need and opening up their closed hearts with my enthusiasm.

Studies in my undergraduate major, Social Work, require practical experience, from which I become aware of the spirit of social work and confirm my determination to further pursue this field. Out of many experiences, the time when I served as a mentor in the year-long project of Growth Guide (aiming to serve children of migrant workers) most inspired this decision. My first mentee was Chen Jiangchuan, a 12-year-old boy, whose parents were too busy working to take care of him. Every Sunday I took a bus across half the city to his home to accompany him. At first, I found time elapsed slowly because he was quite introverted and we had nothing to talk about. Week after week, I continued being a sincere companion to him. I helped him with his homework, accompanied him to play games with his friends in a garbage dump near his home, and gazed silently at the sunset with him. In his narrow and damp home, we served a hotpot and ate together with his parents. Even then he was still not talkative but he began to smile at me and his eyes began to sparkle. Later on, he talked with me about his ambitions, his classmates, teachers and his humiliation in being denied admission into a nearby park (because he was not local.) I used to be his mentor but now I feel he is my mentor. He led me to walk a different path in life, and this experience taught me that, more than theory and skill, heartfelt companionship is the true essential ideal of social work and the origin of benevolence among people.

Later, my internship in August, 2009 showed me that sincerity is far from enough for a social worker. I was given the chance to guide some students in Beijing Railway Electrification School and help them organize a team with mutual trust and cooperation. But it is not so easy to be a group leader. A girl, one of my group members, refused to cooperate and feigned indifference. In order to solve this problem, I, together with my team members, did an “Original Family” in which we shared our ideas about the family member who influenced us most. This proved to be a turning point. She shared with us her family life and what led her to what she was. From then on, I began to get to know her and all group members became more understanding of each other. Together we were able to form a teamwork environment that pushed us forward. Through this experience, I improved my team organization skills, such as knowing when to elicit discussion, when to inspire members to offer each other suggestions, how to break the initial awkwardness and how to help members to cooperate with each other. It convinces me that qualified social work entails not only various skills and expertise but also potential development through the reflection of the relationship with others. Just as my supervisor said, “change life with your own life and make peoples’ lives more beautiful.” This motto inspires me toward further research and work in this field.

Aside from my acquisition of specialized knowledge and practical experiences, I also participated in some research that contributed to my career. My research focuses on migrant populations, especially the aged and children. Such people usually had difficulty in self-identity and adaptation to the environment. But we found little relevant literature from the journals when we initiated a project entitled “Survey on the Living Conditions of Elderly Migrants in Beijing” focusing on the elderly who follow their sons or daughters in their urban migration. We had to design the questionnaire and questions all by ourselves, do the pilot case, interview the aged concerned and validate the result all on our own. After many brainstorms and the frustration of numerous refused interviews, we finally completed the project and derived great benefit from the whole process.

The success motivated me to continue and I became interested in research on migrant children since my sophomore year, and did some relevant research on that subject, including my degree paper. My research mainly focuses on the adaptability of these children in migrant children’s schools and general public schools. I joined Studies on Migrant Children: Current Situation, Development and Solution, co-hosted by Renmin University and Beijing Municipal Education Commission. In this project, I was responsible for studying differences between the migrant children and local children in terms of their social networks. Due to my lack of experience, I felt at sea when facing so much data and could not find a clue for an overall framework. I had to start with some literature and, after careful study, found references which were helpful. I decided to analyze the class structure of the children involved and adopt UCINET to do a further analysis. Gradually, I completed my task and won the approbation of my supervisor. It offered me a valuable chance to practice my quantitative analysis abilities. The data from the above research benefited me when I wrote my degree paper. All these research experiences added to my determination to further my education in social work and laid a solid foundation for my prospective academic research. Despite various difficulties in the initial stage, I improved my research and thesis writing skills. I learnt that difficulties of underprivileged people stemmed largely from injustice of the social system, rather than simply from poverty itself. Hence, I find social work and research to be quite useful in identifying people’s needs, analyzing the question, exploring the resources and in seeking to build a relevant institution.

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